The diagram below shows the stages in processing cocoa beans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in processing cocoa beans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below provides information about how to transform
cocoa
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beans
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into various products. It is
also
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noticeable that there are 3 steps in the development of
cocoa
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beans
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and it takes a lot of time and equipment;
moreover
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, some stages require professional skills. A closer look at the graph reveals the process starts with picking whole
cocoa
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beans
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.
Next,
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the total
beans
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are shelled and drying, and after that pressing the
cocoa
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bean into the
cocoa
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liquor.
Following
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this
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, bifurcation in the production process begins, half of the
cocoa
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liquor goes through the
further
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pressing step
while
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another half encounters
further
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refining. The
further
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pressing stage produces two products
cocoa
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cake and
cocoa
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, the
cocoa
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cake is grided by machine or hand, and converted into
cocoa
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powder,
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, it is already used and delivered to customers. The
cocoa
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is not only sent to the industry cakes drink and
then
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put in the
cocoa
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powder but
also
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transform into industrial chocolate from the
further
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refining process produced.
In addition
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, it is added sugar and goes through
further
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processing, changing into finished chocolate products.
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