The diagram below shows the stages in processing cocoa beans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in processing cocoa beans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below provides information about how to transform
cocoa
beans
into various products. It is
also
noticeable that there are 3 steps in the development of
cocoa
beans
and it takes a lot of time and equipment;
moreover
, some stages require professional skills. A closer look at the graph reveals the process starts with picking whole
cocoa
beans
.
Next,
the total
beans
are shelled and drying, and after that pressing the
cocoa
bean into the
cocoa
liquor.
Following
this
, bifurcation in the production process begins, half of the
cocoa
liquor goes through the
further
pressing step
while
another half encounters
further
refining. The
further
pressing stage produces two products
cocoa
cake and
cocoa
, the
cocoa
cake is grided by machine or hand, and converted into
cocoa
powder,
hence
, it is already used and delivered to customers. The
cocoa
is not only sent to the industry cakes drink and
then
put in the
cocoa
powder but
also
transform into industrial chocolate from the
further
refining process produced.
In addition
, it is added sugar and goes through
further
processing, changing into finished chocolate products.
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