Essay topics: In some countries, more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college , University or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
In some countries, numerous
adults
who have been
graduated and have been working are likely housing Unnecessary verb
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along with
their parents
. This
essay serves whether
the advantages of Change preposition
as whether
this
issue outweigh Correct article usage
the disadvatages
disadvatages
or they may not.
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disadvantages
disadvantage
Firstly
, most of
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the
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apply
adults
tend to live with their family even after they have passed college
years. Correct pronoun usage
their college
This
case is
possibly happened in developing countries Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as Indonesia, Thailand, etc. Moreover
, living with parents
have various advantages. Not only do the children have the benefits living
with their family but the Change preposition
of living
parents
also
do. Working adults
who stay with their family will assist the family regarding to
the financial support. Remove the preposition
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Thus
, the family will be likely financially stable. Consequently
, most of
graduated Change preposition
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adults
will stick to their family
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families
mantaining
a group-supporting family. Correct your spelling
maintaining
As a result
, Family
that has completed members will have Correct article usage
a Family
memory
to remain togetherly since the Add an article
a memory
the memory
parents
will not worry about their loved one anymore.
On the other side, Unbenificial issues may occur if grown-up children stay surrounding
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surrounded
this
could cause the adults
' ability in
socializing Change preposition
to
habit
. Fix the agreement mistake
habits
Furthermore
, these people will have troubles
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trouble
to engage
in Change the verb form
engaging
real life
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real-life
context
without their Fix the agreement mistake
contexts
parent
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parents
in
their side. these people will hardly socialize since the family has been already covered Change preposition
on
to
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in
this
context of life resulting in these people will have issue
in Fix the agreement mistake
issues
real life
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real-life
context
like building a family, paying taxes, and raising children as real evidences.
In conclusion, The advantages of living with family as an adult bring more good than harm Fix the agreement mistake
contexts
such
as helping in
financial support and remaining a Change preposition
with
completed
family. Replace the word
complete
While
the unbeneficial side is likely to be prevented.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...