Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Humans, plants and
animals
are all intertwined and a change in one factor causes a great impact on one another.
Moreover
, the expansion of the human race is at the cost of the lives of
animals
and plant species.Some
people
believe that it is difficult to change
this
situation.
However
, I and others believe that taking the necessary actions will significantly change
this
situation.In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both
the
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views and my opinion.
Firstly
, compared to the past the population has
increased
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doubled and
also
increased the growth of mankind.
This
leads to the development of new towns and houses.And the construction of buildings is being made by destroying the trees.
This
type of activity will disturb the natural habitats.
Furthermore
, luxurious products
such
as belts, shoes, bags, and clothes are made using animal skin.
In addition
to that, some
people
are hunting
animals
to make valuable products.
For instance
, the elephant tusks are used in jewellery and in medicines. The above-said activities have a negative impact on plants and
animals
.
However
, it can be changed by taking necessary actions
such
as the government should encourage their citizens to plant new trees to replace the destroyed ones.
Furthermore
, the government should penalise the
people
who are harming the
animals
.
Last
but not least , the authority should create awareness by conducting seminars and various competitions about preserving nature. In my point of view, the above-mentioned activities should be practised in the world.
In addition
,
people
have to support their government in protecting nature. To summarise
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the points I witnessed above helped to form the belief that the negative impact on plants and
animals
is in the hands of humans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • extinction
  • reforestation
  • conservation programs
  • environmental laws
  • ecosystems
  • technological advances
  • awareness
  • interconnectivity
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem services
  • preserving
  • wildlife
  • mitigate
  • empowering
  • economic and social benefits
  • incentives
  • conservation efforts
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