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The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.

The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.
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The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling
differents
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different
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 types of vehicles
such
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 as
cars
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, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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, it is obvious that individuals have preferred
cars
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 the most.
In addition
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, the number of
cars
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 and trains
using
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used
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have
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has
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 increased gradually
whereas
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 the figure for
bus
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 users has declined slightly. In the initial year, the proportion of car travellers stood at around five
million
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, followed by the quantity of
bus
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 and train commuters with nearly 4
million
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 and 2
million
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 respectively. After 30 years, the proportion of
cars
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 rose to 7
million
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while
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 there
was
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were
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 more than 1
million
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 people using
train
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the train
a train
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 to travel.
In contrast
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, there was a slight drop
of
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in
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 the number of
bus
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 users to approximately 3,5
million
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. Over the 30-year period, it is predicted that the rate of car
travels
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travel
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 will reach a peak
at
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of
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 9
million
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.
Similarly
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,
a
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slight growth is expected to be around 5
million
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.
By contrast
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, the rate of
bus
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 passengers is foreseen to be less common and reduce to 3
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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