Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.
There is currently a controversial argument over whether students can study other subjects
in addition
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courses
to get an achievement. Use synonyms
Although
both groups have their justifications, I personally believe that the view of the first group is more outstanding. Both sides will be addressed in Linking Words
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about studying
books
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is that studying gives them a sense of identity, Linking Words
in other words
, they will be able to gain knowledge of different subjects. Another substantial reason for Linking Words
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is that they will be able to change their educational fields if they are more interested in new Linking Words
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For example
, one of my friends changed her field after spending two semesters at the university.
On the other side, others advocate that, if the learners concentrate more and more on their Linking Words
courses
, they will be able to fulfil their qualifications. Use synonyms
Furthermore
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due to
the fact that studying other Linking Words
books
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are
seriously time-consuming, the learner will not be able to get good scores in their exams. Correct subject-verb agreement
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, some Linking Words
books
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such
as mathematics are difficult and a long time is needed Linking Words
for studying
them.
In conclusion, there is a contentious argument over whether studying other Change preposition
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books
in universities is good or not. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, both sides have their justifications, I undoubtedly believe that Linking Words
this
matter helps students to learn about various fields and choose the best one.Linking Words
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Vocabulary
Be cautious about repetitive phrases. Using 'both sides have their justifications' twice in the essay can lower the vocabulary score.
Vocabulary
Be cautious with word usage. The term 'pupils' is generally used for younger students, not those at the university level. Using 'students' or 'learners' would be more appropriate.
Grammar
Use appropriate academic expressions. 'get an achievement' is not a correct term. Consider using 'achieve success in their academic realm' or similar phrases.
Vocabulary
Stay consistent with the terminology you use. At the beginning of the essay, you mentioned 'studying other subjects', but later you referred to them as 'books'. Clearly distinguish between studying 'books' and 'subjects/courses'.
Coherence/Cohesion
The essay would be more cohesive if it made connections between the two differing perspectives. For example, explaining how a balanced approach might be possible or beneficial could help the essay feel more unified.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
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