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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of large cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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The location to build a new business has always been hard to decide. With the large number of offices that had already been built in the urban
areas
, the government encourages people to set up their businesses in the small
areas
. I believe that there are both sides to
this
 view and
this
 essay will try to discuss it. Setting the business in the new
areas
 means that it would have fewer competitors since the idea itself has not been fully developed.
In addition
, since the community is not familiar with the product, it has a bigger chance to become a great hit among individuals.
For example
,
while
 fast-food restaurants are everywhere in Jakarta when it first opened in Cianjur, there was a 2 hours long line waiting to get good.
In addition
, the price of land in rural
areas
 is more likely to be cheaper.
On the other hand
, since the population in the countryside is small, the income could be less.
In addition
, it often needs an additional cost for the business owner to introduce the products to its people since it would be considered a strange thing.
However
, I realized that these disadvantages can not outweigh the benefits.
To conclude
, there are several benefits and costs to
this
 view, but
this
 essay agrees that it is almost always a good thing to try a new experience and supports the government's decision to move some businesses to the less crowded
areas
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • urban congestion
  • regional development
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare
  • environmental impact
  • air quality
  • over-reliance
  • cultural disruption
  • industrial activity
  • ecosystems
  • sustainable
  • urban-rural migration
  • economic incentives
  • workforce
  • relocation costs
  • zoning regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • public-private partnerships
  • livability
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