The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the UK from 1997 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the UK from 1997 to 2001.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
illustrate
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the percentage of
the
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families
has different kinds of
technology
in
UK
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the UK
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from 1997 to 2001.
Overall
.
The
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Families
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families
has
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the
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five types of
the
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technology
are
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a huge increase in these years.
In
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1997 to 1998, the Internet, Computer and CD
player
were popular in
the
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UK
families
. The internet was increased from 10% to 20%, the Computer from 40% to 45% and the CD
Player
from 60% to 70%. But the
families
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has
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DVD
player
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players
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was
reduce
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from 25% to 15%. And in 1998 the percentage of
the
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families
with
telephone
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a telephone
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was
same
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to
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the 1997. In fact, for
the
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UK
families
,
the
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some type of
the
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technology
will have
big
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a big
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increased
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from 1998 to 2001. Most
the
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families
has
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a DVD
Player
, Internet, Computer and Telephone
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are
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increase to 40%, 50%, 60% and 79%. But the
families
has
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the CD
player
was similar from
the
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1998 to 1999. And there
are
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increase
to
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of
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70%
in
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from 1999 to 2001.
Therefore
, most
UK
families
has the five types of
the
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apply
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technology
in 2001.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, technology, uk, player with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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