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The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities. Some people say that teachers, not politicians, should be responsible for this task. To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#subjects #children #schools #authorities #people #teachers #politicians
These maps show the restructuring of
school
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 from 1985 to now.
School
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 population has increased by 800 students (from 1500 to 2300).
This
school
 has undergone a lot of
chages
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changes
 since 1985. There is only one place that has not changed, it is an office next to the entrance. In 1985 near the office was a library, but now it has
replaced
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 by
learning
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 resources centre with a computer room.
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, there are some new
sport
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 facilities for students like a pool and a fitness centre. Nowadays in
this
school
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 there are 3
clasroom
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classroom
block
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instead
 of 2 as it was before. One new floor has been added to one of the blocks as well.
Anonther
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Another
 significant alteration is
a
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 destruction of the road leading to playing fields. By the
way
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 the area of these playing fields
have
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 been reduced nearly twice. From the given maps we can see that there are many various significant and minor changes.
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