Your class has listened to a radio discussion on how more young people can be encouraged to study science. You have made the notes below: Write an essay discussing two of the points in your notes. You should explain which way would be more effective in encouraging young people to study science, providing reasons to support your opinion.

Science
has always been quite an esteemed
study
field,
however
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in recent
years
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a bigger and more exciting job market has caused a noticeable decrease in the interest of young people
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science
. In
this
essay
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I will discuss two possible solutions to encourage young people to
study
science
. The first option to consider is school programmes that could change the way
students
view
science
, giving a more
hands on
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education, with interactive activities which make
science
a fun challenge,
such
as experiments and original projects.
In
addition
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students
should be introduced to
science
in a completely immersive approach, with visits to places of interest and talks from professionals. Another solution could be giving
students
certain grants that assure a future in
this
field. The government should make and fulfill promises to young
students
, and raise funds to promote
science
studies which will provide stability and a job in the
science
field.
This
way
students
will be introduced to the countless opportunities
this
education can get them,
as well as
the possibilities regarding the different areas in
science
. Many
students
worry about what their future will be like if they
study
certain careers,
obviously
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the main issue is finding a job, but getting one they actually enjoy is a concern
that is
usually overlooked . In conclusion, both of these solutions could encourage young people to
study
science
, but in my
opinion
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government grants are the way to go
,
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since
students
need certainty about their future and the guarantee that
science
is a viable option.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • despite

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