Your class has listened to a radio discussion on how more young people can be encouraged to study science. You have made the notes below: Write an essay discussing two of the points in your notes. You should explain which way would be more effective in encouraging young people to study science, providing reasons to support your opinion.
Science
has always been quite an esteemed study
field, however
in recent Add a comma
however,
years
a bigger and more exciting job market has caused a noticeable decrease in the interest of young people Add a comma
years,
for
Change preposition
in
science
. In this
essay
I will discuss two possible solutions to encourage young people to Add a comma
essay,
study
science
. The first option to consider is school programmes that could change the way students
view science
, giving a more hands on
education, with interactive activities which make Add a hyphen
hands-on
science
a fun challenge, such
as experiments and original projects. In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
students
should be introduced to science
in a completely immersive approach, with visits to places of interest and talks from professionals. Another solution could be giving students
certain grants that assure a future in this
field. The government should make and fulfill promises to young students
, and raise funds to promote science
studies which will provide stability and a job in the science
field. This
way students
will be introduced to the countless opportunities this
education can get them, as well as
the possibilities regarding the different areas in science
. Many students
worry about what their future will be like if they study
certain careers, obviously
the main issue is finding a job, but getting one they actually enjoy is a concern Add a comma
obviously,
that is
usually overlooked . In conclusion, both of these solutions could encourage young people to study
science
, but in my opinion
government grants are the way to goAdd a comma
opinion,
,
since Remove the comma
apply
students
need certainty about their future and the guarantee that science
is a viable option.Submitted by santos_dij on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite