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The chart below shows the percentage that house prices increased every year in 3 countries from 1998 to 2003.

The chart below shows the percentage that house prices increased every year in 3 countries from 1998 to 2003.
The line graph illustrates
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how many per
cent
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 house
prices
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 in
Britain
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,
Australia
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 and the United States increased every year between 1998 and 2003.
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, the
prices
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 for residential premises in all countries started to grow more significantly by the end of the period,
although
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 between 1998 and 2001 the
growth
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 rates fluctuated within roughly the same range.
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,
while
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 the
growth
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 rate of
prices
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 in
Australia
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 was lower than that in
Britain
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, in the early 2000s the former overtook the latter, but
then
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 had fallen slightly by 2003.
Britain
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 and
Australia
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 saw the highest
growth
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 in house
prices
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,
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,
while
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Britain
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 stood at just under 15 per
cent
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 in 1998 and fluctuated between approximately 10 and 15 per
cent
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 until 2001,
Australia
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 experienced a lower price rise, standing at around 6 per
cent
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 in 1998 and being erratic between 4 and 10 per
cent
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 until 2001, where it soared to hit a peak at just under 20 per
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 in the second half of 2002 and
then
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 dropped slightly to approximately 16 per
cent
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 in 2003.
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,
Britain
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 skyrocketed consistently since 2001 and had amounted to just over 25 per
cent
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 by 2003. In the United
States
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 the increase in house
prices
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 was the least significant.
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 the
growth
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 rate stood at just 5 per
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, it followed a similar but more moderate pattern of rise than the other countries, growing steadily over the period to end at roughly 6 per
cent
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 in 2003, the same rate as that of
Australia
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 at the beginning of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent, prices, britain, australia, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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