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Being able to purchase goods from any places in the planet has made nations around the world become almost identical. Do you think this is a possitive or negative development?

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In recent days, we are able to purchase goods of any type from any country easily, and
this
 has improved the knowledge of
people
 about different food practices and cultures. I think
this
 is certainly a positive development because we will eventually develop a broader mindset through which we can attain unity in diversity.
Firstly
, as mentioned I agree that easy access and affordability make
people
's lives easier, and they will get awareness about different foods and cultures. Owing to
this
, the tourism industry will
also
 develop, and in ,addition more and more
people
 will understand the value of diversity in our world.
For example
, currently
due to
 migration in India, Indian products and households are available for easy purchase in most abroad countries, and
due to
this
, many know about Indian culture and
this
 exposure has led most societies to cherish their values and welcome them for many other opportunities.
Secondly
, not only it can be beneficial for global unity, but it can
also
 be useful for common
people
's lives as more options will be available for them to choose from. They will get to experience rare exotic fruits and vegetables, and in most countries where technology has not improved, they can buy imported goods from developing nations which can be very useful for their daily activities.
For example
, advanced tech devices
such
 as Apple laptops, and some smartphones are easily available for purchase all around the world, and
this
 has improved the daily lives of
people
 to a greater extent. In conclusion,
although
 wider access to all types of goods eradicated native values, it has brought significant change in the public's minds towards accepting different cultures and their values. Often big changes happen through small improvements, so
this
 change will only improve our global market and
hence
 it is certainly a positive development.
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