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The line graph below shows tefts er thousand cars in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows tefts er thousand cars in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart
illustartes
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illustrates
 the
number
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 of
car
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 thefts in four different countries for a decade, from 1990 to 1999.
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, it can be clearly seen that there was a slight decrease in the
number
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 of
car
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 stealing in Great
Britain
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, France, and
Canada
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
car
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theft
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 rose in Sweden over the given period.
The
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Great
Britain
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 had the highest
car
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theft
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cases
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 among other countries. Looking at the information in more
details
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detail
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, around 18,000
car
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theft
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cases
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was happened
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happened
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 in
the
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Great
Britain
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 in 1990.
This
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number
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was
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doubled as compared to the
cases
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 in
the
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Sweden with around 9,000. The figure
of
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for
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car
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theft
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 in
the
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Great
Britain
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 increased to 20,000 in two years later.
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, it fluctuated for the rest of
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year
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the year
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 and it hit the bottom at about 16,000
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. As regards Sweden, the
car
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theft
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cases
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 started at around 9,000 and
it
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apply
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wet
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went
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 up to around 12,000. Followed by the unchanged
number
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 of
cases
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 for three years were before climbing
up
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apply
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to approximately 14,000 in the
last
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year
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. As for
car
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theft
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 in
Canada
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, the
cases
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 started at around 7,000, and
it
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they
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 decreased to 5,000 in 1993.
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, it experienced a
slightly
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slight
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 increase to 5,000 in 1999. In the early
year
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,
car
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theft
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 in
Canada
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 was the lowest
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cases
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case
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 among others with around 6,000
cases
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.
Then
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 it fluctuated until the rest of the
year
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 at 5,000
cases
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, and it had the same
cases
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with
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as
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Canada
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, britain, canada, theft, cases, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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