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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
udnerground
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underground
railway
 systems in six cities
of
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when the
railway
 is opened,
length
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the length
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 of the
railway
, and
passengers
 per
year
. It is evident that
Tokyo
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Tokyo's
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 underground
railway
 systems have the most
passengers
 per
year
 reaching a whopping 1.9 billion
passengers
 per
year
compares
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compared
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 to the next most
passengers
 underground
railway
system
 in Paris, reaching 1.1 billion
passengers
 per
year
.
To begin
, London
have
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 the oldest and longest underground subway
system
 coming to 394 Kilometres of
route
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the route
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and
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apply
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it was opened in 1863
while
 the newest underground subway
system
 is located in Los Angeles
opened
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and opened
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 in 2001 stretching at just 28 Kilometres of
route
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the route
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.
Similarly
, Paris has the second longest and oldest underground subway
system
 opened in 1900 and
consist
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consists
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 of 199 Kilometres of
route
.
While
 London
have
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has
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 the longest
railway
route
 out of the six cities,
kyoto
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Kyoto
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have
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has
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 the shortest
railway
route
 coming
at
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just 11 Kilometers of
route
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the route
a route
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 when it first opened in 1981. Kyoto
also
have
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has
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 the least
passengers
 per
year
comparing
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compared
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 to all the other six cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, passengers, year, system, route with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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