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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures indicate the proportion of the 4 categories of lawbreaking and how many
crimes
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 happened in different ages in the United Kingdom in the
last
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 year.
According to
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 the charts, almost all cases were done by a particular age group in a particular type. The highest number of illegal acts were done by
people
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 who were 20
years
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 old at 80,000.
People
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 who were 16
years
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 old were the second largest and those who were 24
years
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 old were third at 70,000 and 60,000, respectively.
In addition
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,
people
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 started to do
crimes
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 from the age of 12 who recorded the smallest number of
crimes
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 and by 64
years
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 old continued to do
crimes
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. The crime number gradually decreased from young
people
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 to old
people
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. In types of crime, the highest proportion was violent
crimes
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 at 46%. Property
crimes
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 were second at 23% and drug
crimes
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 were third at 22%. The lowest per cent was for public order crime at 9%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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