In the future people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash all payment may have to be made by card or using phons Do you think it will happen one day Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash

Techology
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Technology
has found it is way into every aspect of our lives.
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the way we pay for things in
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I believe we will not need
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cash
in the future. First of all,
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a generation
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that
have
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grown with technology have
a
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become it is
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on multiple
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to perform even
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simple tasks.
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an
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example most people from
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genaration
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generation
can be seen holding their
phons
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phones
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at
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all the time.which make it easier for them to process payment with something they already have
to
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their hand.
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fashion is
also
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a very important role in our society. Being able to process payment with an electronic device
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an
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card.
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not only saves us time in counting
cash
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basis when both men and women are getting ready to get out taking only the phone a couple of cards and their keys.
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conclusion, even though there are both pros and cons for
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up using
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.I believe that our obsession with technology is a slippery slope that will eventually end
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on us giving
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