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In the future people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash all payment may have to be made by card or using phons Do you think it will happen one day Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash

#future #people #shops #cash #payment #card #phons
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Techology
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Technology
 has found it is way into every aspect of our lives.
Inclding
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Including
 the way we pay for things in
shop
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the shop
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.
Following
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this
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trend
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 I believe we will not need
use
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to use
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cash
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 in the future. First of all,
generation
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a generation
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 that
have
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has
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 grown with technology have
a
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apply
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become it is
depend
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 on multiple
device
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devices
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 to perform even
the
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apply
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simple tasks.
as
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As
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an
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apply
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example most people from
the
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this
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genaration
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generation
 can be seen holding their
phons
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phones
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at
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apply
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all the time.which make it easier for them to process payment with something they already have
to
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in
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 their hand.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
as
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apply
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fashion is
also
Linking Words
paying
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playing
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 a very important role in our society. Being able to process payment with an electronic device
as
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such as
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an
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a
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 card.
Is
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It
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 not only saves us time in counting
cash
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.
This
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 can be seen on a
day today
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day-today
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 basis when both men and women are getting ready to get out taking only the phone a couple of cards and their keys.
To
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In
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 conclusion, even though there are both pros and cons for
given
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giving
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 up using
cash
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.I believe that our obsession with technology is a slippery slope that will eventually end
onusgiving
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on us giving
 up
cash
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.
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