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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that a number of people believe that
students
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 can study anything
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 their desire,
whereas
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 others consider that pupils must study lessons that will be beneficial for them in subsequent
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such
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 as those, which
related
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 to science or technology. It is undeniable that university studies have become an essential part of our life.
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether
students
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 should learn more critical business or general. A commonly held belief is that university pupils should concentrate on more serious and significant subjects . As evidence of
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this
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 they point to not
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 your valuable
time
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 on unnecessary things, which will not be useful in the future.
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, by spending more
time
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 on their major learnings, they may be more savvy and be engrossed by it. It could be explained by the fact that
students
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 will have more leisure
time
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 for relaxation, it will, undoubtedly, lead to
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 the state of their mental health and stress reduction.
On the other hand
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, some people claim that
such
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 subjects, as global competencies, self-knowledge , creative classes and many more are vital too.
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, they may mention that
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studying , whatever
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an undergraduate
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like
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is like
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, can be a really good motivation for them and
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 for understanding and mind development about what they really want in
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 life.
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, they will not feel voltage and reluctance to go to university in order to
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 bothersome and stuffy subjects,
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 over
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 , they will stop going to study altogether and their academic validation will wane. In
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 taking everything into account, I would argue that it has two sides, which
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 as beneficial,
adverse
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and adverse
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 consequences , whenever
students
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 have their right
ti
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to
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 choose what they want or
studying
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study
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 more crucial ones,
owning
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owing
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 to the fact that only they are responsible for their future life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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