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These days people throw away a lot of the food that they buy from grocery stores or order at restaurants. Why do you think people throw away food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food waste? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
people
 are throwing away a lot of
food
 that they purchase from grocery stores or order at restaurants.
This
 is becoming a serious environmental issue since the amount of
food
waste
 is rising every day. Why is
this
 situation happening in our society, and what should we do to relieve
this
 problem? The main reason
people
 are throwing away
food
 is because the
food
 supply is much higher than the demand now. These days, we don't feel the lack of
food
 anymore. Now, we can easily grab
food
 from grocery stores or restaurants whenever we want. Since we don't feel the anxiety of hunger or crisis caused
from
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by
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 not
enough
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having enough
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food
,
food
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the food
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waste
 problem is ignored. If we want to have more
food
 than we can actually eat, we just simply order as lot as we want and
then
 simply throw
away
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it away
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. Based on
this
 reason, what should be done to prevent the rising rate of
food
waste
? First of all, the government can increase taxes on
food
waste
. Even though there is a tax required when we are littering
food
, it is not a big threat to citizens now. Increasing the tax will provide potential threats to citizens to be aware of their
food
waste
 quantity and persuade them to reduce
waste
.
Moreover
, Campaigns including messages
such
 as 'Less
food
waste
 can save our earth' can
also
 help to convince
people
. The power of personal actions that can persuade
people
 is much more emphasized now than before. In conclusion, the high rate of
food
waste
 has become a big environmental problem in our society. Since the
food
 supply became way much higher than the
food
 demand, now we are in an era where we never feel hunger
nor
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or
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 the importance of
food
. Movements to reduce unmeaningful
food
 litter are strongly required
to
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of
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 everyone as a responsible citizen.
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