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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

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Some
students
 who are bright and ambitious may prefer to study business or engineering
instead
 of
science
 because scientists are often paid less than business managers or engineers. And universities offer a wide range of courses with flexible timing that can have a significant impression on society.
Firstly
, the world has witnessed dramatic growth in the global market where most of the businesses take place more than ever before, which might fade the demand for
science
 employment in prominent sectors over-trading. A surge in population creates a huge demand for land and technology than in earlier times, so a significant drop in demand
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 can be seen.
Secondly
, as compared to the past, now universities offer a tremendous range of courses, which are complex and flexible as per student's needs. Potential
students
 can opt wide range of subjects that offers affordable tasks during the study with minimal time duration.
Students
 find it easy than
science
 because these subjects do not include heavy calculations and formulas which are a must for
science
students
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 a In conclusion, the younger generation has more inclination toward high-paying job curriculums which offers comparatively easier study than
science
 subjects and more opportunities in the future.
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