Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Our society progresses

everyday

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as a result

, we need more means of transport to travel to our jobs, homes etc. Nowadays, it's quite normal to watch

car

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a car

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jam on a big street, but has

the

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car

ownership increased over the years

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To begin

with, I would like to present my point of view.

Personally

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I am totally convinced that in modern times

car

usage

has increased. First of all, now it is more financially available to buy more than one

car

Secondly

, big families have more vehicles. It is

quite

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quite a

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usual situation

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when dad works on a jon which on

the

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one side

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a city and mother drives to the opposite side to

strat

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start

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her work.

Thirdly

, my own travelling experience proves that more and more countries have huge

traffic

jams.

For instance

London,

traffic

jams here are unavoidable.

City

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is large, there are lots of buses, shipping vans, trucks with products, people who drive their families home etc.

However

, it all happens because of

road

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the road

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network, routes are small and have only two

traffic

lanes

Subsequently

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more and more people choose public transport, like

metro

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the metro

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bycicles

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bicycles

or trains, they can reach

place

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the place

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quickly and don't get late.

Moreover

, I firmly believe that governments can help us to stop

car

jams.

Traffic

facilities are able to increase taxes for vehicle buying. The next thing to do is to build more and improve the old

metro

and train

lanes

this

will provide raise in

metro

and train

usage

in all countries. To add to

this

small

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countries and towns there

are

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metro

can offer to their citizens to get on

bycicles

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bicycles

. Everything we need to do is invest in

bycicle

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bicycle

lanes

and maybe it is reasonable to pay for bike

usage

Then

person

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the person

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gets to the place by bike, he receives money for it.

To conclude

, presently we have to fight with non-endable

car

usage

. It has become

huge

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a huge

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problem nowadays, which takes our time. Governments can help us with that by building new public transport

lanes

, encouraging people to ride

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apply

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bycicles

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bicycles

and giving money for that.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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