Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Our society progresses
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as a result
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, we need more means of transport to travel to our jobs, homes etc. Nowadays, it's quite normal to watch
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car
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jam on a big street, but has
the
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car
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ownership increased over the years
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with, I would like to present my point of view.
Personally
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I am totally convinced that in modern times
car
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usage
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has increased. First of all, now it is more financially available to buy more than one
car
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.
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, big families have more vehicles. It is
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usual situation
,
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when dad works on a jon which on
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one side
if
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of
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a city and mother drives to the opposite side to
strat
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her work.
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, my own travelling experience proves that more and more countries have huge
traffic
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jams.
For instance
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London,
traffic
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jams here are unavoidable.
City
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is large, there are lots of buses, shipping vans, trucks with products, people who drive their families home etc.
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, it all happens because of
road
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the road
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network, routes are small and have only two
traffic
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lanes
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Subsequently
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more and more people choose public transport, like
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metro
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the metro
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,
bycicles
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bicycles
or trains, they can reach
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quickly and don't get late.
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, I firmly believe that governments can help us to stop
car
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jams.
Traffic
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facilities are able to increase taxes for vehicle buying. The next thing to do is to build more and improve the old
metro
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and train
lanes
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,
this
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will provide raise in
metro
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and train
usage
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in all countries. To add to
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,
small
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countries and towns there
are
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no
metro
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can offer to their citizens to get on
bycicles
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bicycles
. Everything we need to do is invest in
bycicle
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bicycle
lanes
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and maybe it is reasonable to pay for bike
usage
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.
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person
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gets to the place by bike, he receives money for it.
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, presently we have to fight with non-endable
car
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usage
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. It has become
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problem nowadays, which takes our time. Governments can help us with that by building new public transport
lanes
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, encouraging people to ride
on
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bycicles
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bicycles
and giving money for that.
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