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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
#information #consumption #food #grams #week #uk
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The line graph displays the figure for a person that
eat
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eats
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 convenience
food
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 (grams per
week
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), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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, two
kind
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kinds
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 of junk
food
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 (
hamburguer
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hamburger
hamburgers
, fish and tips) experienced an upward trend.
In contrast
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, pizza has been decreasing
in
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for
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 15 years until it
stated
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started
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 a light increase. Starting from 1970, Fish and Chips customers had started with less than a hundred eaters per
week
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 reaching the
pick
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peak
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 in 1990 with 5 hundred
of
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apply
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snack
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snacks
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 per
week
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.
Moreover
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 had risen
steadly
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steadily
25
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by 25
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 to 300
meal
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meals
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 per
week
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 in 20 years (1970 to 1990) and became after 193 the second choice for shoppers.
On the other hand
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, pizza had a steady decline until 1985, even though followed by a light growth until 1990, going
to
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from
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 200 to approximately 220 pizzas per
week
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. Surprisingly pizza lost the first place of
food
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 choices when became the
last
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 option for fast
food
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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