You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits, you encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager. In this letter: Describe what the problem was Tell what the swimming pool staff have done about it. Suggest your solution to the problem.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to complain about the recreational area pool which I noticed last
two weeks related to bath services.
Primarily, I regularly visit there with my friends and family members to relieve the stress from my hectic schedule. However
, I noticed last
two weeks the shower area should need repair but your staff member could not solve that issue.
Moreover
, I also
tell many times your employees to fix that problem but they ignore it. After having a bath in the pool everyone wants to clean their body with fresh moistness then
they can preserve their body from skin allegories. Besides
this
, your staff members can not take any action regarding this
problem.
All in all, you would be fixed
that problem as soon as early, visitors easily wash the chemical water from their bodies in the shower area. Wrong verb form
fix
Along with
this
, you would like to set the temperature of the shower drink to a normal level then
everyone uses the hot dampness after doing
fun in the pool.
Looking forward to your positive response to Verb problem
having
this
topic.
Yours sincerely,
Eva Smith.Submitted by rajveersra55 on
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