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Band 4.5

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..........., You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, I am writing to you regarding the problems on
the
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bus
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 line A36 in the
last
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 six months. The
Bus
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 line A36 is a vital route for the commuters in our city to cross the
danube
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. It is
therefore
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 problematic to see that in the
last
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 six
months
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 the service has been declining.
Busses
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 have been late or have been skipped entirely. I myself, use the
Bus
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 A36 daily to
comute
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commute
 to work. The constant late
busses
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 resulted in multiple late meetings with crucial clients. It has been noted by my boss and I have been reprimanded for my tardiness as unprofessional.
While
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 I understand that there are
unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances that are hard to plan for, as a public service your company has a duty to do better. I suggest shorter
intervalls
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interviews
 for
busses
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 to
compansate
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compensate
 for either late
busses
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 or skipped ones and and hiring more
bus
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 drivers to service the influx of
bus
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drives
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drivers
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. Sincerely, Katharina Wilfinge

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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