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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010

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Two given plans show the reconstruction of
ground
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the ground
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 floor of
museum
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the museum
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 from 1990 to 2010. There are several striking changes in that area. First of all, in the upper right corner archaeology gallery was divided
in
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 two different rooms, which were later named as
Children’s
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the Children’s
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 interactive zone and
Poster
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the Poster
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 display area. The Gift shop was enlarged, and
café
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was appeared
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 there. At the same time Natural history room and
museum
 office did not go through any modifications and remained
at
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 the same place. When it comes to
Reception
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 counter, which was located next to the
Museum
 office, it was
also
 replaced in 2010. The Statue near the stairs was moved to the ground floor’s
center
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. Another significant redesign happened with
entrance
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, which
were
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 widened in 2010.
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, a lift was added
on
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 the floor. Taken as a whole ground floor of
museum
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the museum
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 has a huge number of alterations between 1990 and 2010.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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