The graphs below show the different reasons of two group of students to choose Dorrifod University Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.

The graphs below show the different reasons of two group of students to 

choose Dorrifod University

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and 

mae comparisons with relevant.
The two pie
chart
display about different reasons
of
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two
group
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groups
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of
students
to choose Dorrifod University. In the
first
chart
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information is given on the age group between 18-24 and in the other diagram the age group is 25 and over. In the
first
chart
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36% of people give
first
choice to those universities which are close to their house and 35% of
students
select those unis which offer more number of courses. 2% of
students
also
go to whose college which staff is reputed. Facilities are given less importance which is around 14%. 9% of children go that college which provides the opportunity to study abroad and 4% of people choose related to the industry. In another
chart
39% of
students
choose a university near home , 12% of children select well-reputed teachers, 2% people choose a good campus, 3%
of
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choose
on
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the
basic
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of
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opportunity to study abroad as part of the course, 24% are selecting which
have
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all types of course and 20% goes for related to
industry
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the industry
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. From the
,
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diagram
it is clear that
first
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preface is given to the near place and after that different course offered is
also
important.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, students, first with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graphs
  • reasons
  • choose
  • Dorrifod University
  • summarize
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • main features
  • make comparisons
  • relevant
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