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PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today with the rising technology
crime
 ratio has
also
 increased to a significant ratio. The
afforementioned
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aforementioned
 statement says that criminals should not be sent to prison
instead
 they should be given education and job training.
This
 will be an effective measure
to
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 our society. in
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 we will discuss both aspects
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 the statement. First of all, if we go with the operative solution in my
opnion
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opinion
 it will
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 a lot
,
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 because one goes for
crime
 and theft only
due to
 hunger and
complexities
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 of life for which he
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 and do not
found
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 any solution
besides
crime
. If
this
 measure came into
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 may be the
crime
 ratio can get
a
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fall.
For example
, the criminal goes to do
crime
 if he
do
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 not find a way to survive so if he is given
eduaction
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education
 and job training he can find
way
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 to live and survive.
this
 can be an effective approach.
On the other
hand
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 some are illiterate and do not
have
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 take any effect and
keeps
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keep
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 repeating their crimes because they get
additcted
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addicted
 to
such
 things.
In addition
, criminals who go extreme with their crimes like they can kill people for their benefit they should be sent to prison because if
this
 did not so
then
 murder will get so common and
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.
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i
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 have seen in
Krachi
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that road
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crime
 is so common even they can kill innocents for their concerns. So
this
 is not acceptable at all. In
conclusion
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i
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 would say am agree with
this
 aforementioned statement to some extent because it will give an upright effect
to
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crime
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 rate , but disagree
also
 because some crimes are not acceptable at any cost so they should be prisoned for the sake of goodness.
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