PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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they should be given education and job training.

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repeating their crimes because they get

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because some crimes are not acceptable at any cost so they should be prisoned for the sake of goodness.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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The data below shows information about energy production in a country in two separate years 1995: coal (29,8%), gas (29,63%), petro (29,27%), nuclear (6,4%), other (4,9%) 2005: coal (30,93%, gas (30,31%), petro (19,55%), nuclear (10,10%), other (0,10%)

People aim to achieve a balance between their work and personal life, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problem? How to overcome it?

These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.