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The chart below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 what Anthropology
gradutes
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graduates
 from one university did after finishing
thier
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their
 undergraduate degree course, the table
also
 shows the salaries of the anthropologists in
work
 after five years. The chart
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 that 52%
people
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work
 full
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, 8% do
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 postgrad education and there are Not known. There
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12%
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who
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are
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unemployed. 5%
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are doing both
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time
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given table
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shows about salaries of anthropology graduates who have
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 for 5 years.
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Freelance consultants and
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the Government
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 sector earns only 5% and in Private companies 10%
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earns
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 between $25000-49999. 15%
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 of Freelance consultants and government
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sector
, and 35%
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of employes
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employes
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employees
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 in private
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companies
earn $50000-74999. Freelance
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consultants
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the Governmnet
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Governmnet
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government
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 $75000-99999 and $100000
respectivety
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respectively
 40%,30% and 25% and 40%,50%and 30%. From about
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it is clear that
 Anthropology
gradutes
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graduates
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student
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students
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 get high
salary
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salaries
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