You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam,

This

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is Mahsa Hassani the manager of Lily Pet Food company

who

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held a reunion in your conference room on May 21st.

First,

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I would like to appreciate the amazing service we received and

also

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the high-quality

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the

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sound system. Our participants were

mesmorized

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mesmerised

not only by the beautiful design of your hotel but

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by the lovely rose pots in the backyard.

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that everyone was quite satisfied with the professional staff you have.

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, many complaints raised to me regarding the food quality. Unfortunately, some of our employees were hospitalized

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food poisoning and others went through a terrible stomachache. I believe that was the chicken since it was a bit stinky and hard to chew. I think applying some extra supervision

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the kitchen, and the methods of cooking is vital as it can cause serious problems.

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cheking

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checking

the ingredients regularly to make sure they are fresh is fundamental. Again thank you so much for everything being provided and the nice experience. regards Mahsa

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
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therefore
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although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

176 words

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Compliments
Ambiance
Professionalism
Hospitality
Quality
Variety
Freshness
Catering
Menu options
Dietary requirements
Feedback
Survey
Collaboration
Improvements
Rectify
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Client satisfaction
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