Advancement in science is necessary for cancer treatment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The incremental technologies play crucial roles to provoke an
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health care system for patients who suffer from
cancer
. Despite some argue that the alternative
treatments
, including certain
herble
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herbal
tea
as well as
extream
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extreme
diets, are more
efficiency
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, I am in favour of the methods based on modern technologies and
science
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researches
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. On the one hand, alternative
treatments
of
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cancer
are popular in many regions nowadays, which claims
have
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better
affects
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without
side-affects
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caused by
science
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treatments
,
such
as hair loss,
vomiting
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,
along with
the hazards caused by
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in
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. They believe intake
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herble
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herbal
tea made with certain
ingrediants
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ingredients
could help
immue
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immune
system to self-cure.
For example
, many residents in China who have
cancer
are tend
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to
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medicine from local clinics
instead
of having proper
treatments
in hospitals.
On the other hand
, I believe advanced
science
is essential for people to deter death from
cancer
, first of all, it could
provides
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a systematic treatment, allowing a wide
useage
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usage
around the world.
For example
, some commercial pharmacies tread in a tidy sum of money for the perks of advancement in
science
to find efficient
treatments
with minimum
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.
Secondly
,
while
science
making progress, it is able to predict and prevent diseases as
such
in advance, which could reduce the chance for people to suffer from
cancer
.
For instance
, there is a new way of health examination by using the
lavitory
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lavatory
of attendants to find their genetic health hazard and provide a
coordinary
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co ordinary
suggestion for them to prevent certain diseases. To summarise, whilst some suggest that the
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immune
system of
human
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body
are
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able to defend the threats from cance,
need
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only some nutrients from certain herbs,
however
, I strongly agree that the advancement in
science
is necessary to
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reduce
the damage fostered by
cancer
since people are able to receive better
treatments
based on outstanding technologies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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