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The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents information about the
population
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 who lived in the city in 4 Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, consisting of predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of the
population
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 living in the cities in
Malaysia
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 increased rapidly.
By contrast
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, the percentage of living in cities in
Thailand
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 increased slightly. Interestingly, the line graph of the
population
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 of those in the
Philippines
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 fluctuates. From 1970 to 1990, the percentages of living in cities
population
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 in all 4 countries increased continuously, accounting for 12 per
cent
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 to 20 per
cent
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 in Indonesia, 18 per
cent
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 to 25 per
cent
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 in
Thailand
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, 30 per
cent
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 to 42 per
cent
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 in
Malaysia
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, and 31 per
cent
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 to 49 per
cent
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 in the
Philippines
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. From 1990 to 2020, the percentages of the
population
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 in
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia continued to rise to 71 per
cent
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, 28 per
cent
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, and 48 per
cent
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 in order.
By contrast
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, the percentage of the
population
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 in the
Philippines
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 decreased slightly to 42 per
cent
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 from 49 in 1990. From 2020 to 2040, the percentages of all 4 countries are predicted to increase significantly, accounting for 81 per
cent
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 in
Malaysia
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, 60 per
cent
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 in Indonesia, 53 per
cent
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 in the
Philippines
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, and 46 in
Thailand
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, thailand, philippines, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentages
  • population
  • Asia
  • countries
  • urban population
  • China
  • India
  • Japan
  • Indonesia
  • increased
  • decreasing
  • projected
  • predicted
  • peaked
  • declining
  • steadily
  • rate of increase
  • comparisons
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