The graphs below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graphs below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line chart demonstrates the
amount
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of travellers
traveling
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a specific Caribbean
isle
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from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, it could be clearly seen that the total number of visitors
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sharply increased during
this
period.
On the other hand
, apparently, the visitors who used the cruise ship for the
accomodation
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accommodation
have gradually grown with little fluctuations
while
other
category
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showed
a changing patters
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. Looking at
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details, during
this
period,
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the total number of backpackers
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rose from 1
million
to 3.5
million
. It was a considerable increment.
Furthermore
,
according to
these details,
although
between 2010 to 2011 it displayed a little
iimprovement
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improvement
of the cruise
ships
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lovers in the Caribbean
isle
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, but again it
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fell back in 2012.
However
, from 2012 to 2017, the
amount
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of travellers, who utilised
the
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Cruise ships as
the
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shelter, have grown considerably compared with
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from 0.25
million
to 2
million
. The other notable changing pattern
recorded
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by vacationers who stayed
an
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island. It is evident that
within
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2011 to 2016, these trippers used slightly the islet more than
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two years.
Besides
, It reached
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1.5 and it continued during
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the next three years
such
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2013
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, 2014 and 2015, but by 2016, it indicated
that
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a little drop.
Nonetheless
, by 2017, again it could be achieved the target of 1.5
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.
At the
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considering
the
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all figures, we could conclude that during
this
contemporary period,
visitors
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population have significantly enhanced.
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