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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the proportions of premature and elderly
people
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, average income per capita and impoverished
people
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 in
California
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,
Utah
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 and Florida. As can be seen from the table,
California
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 had the highest economic output per capita, but the greatest poverty population. Meanwhile,
Utah
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 had the most
people
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 under 18 and the least poor individuals of the three regions. To commence with, a
California
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 person on average made 23.000 dollars, which was slightly higher than that in Florida at 22.000 dollars.
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 a
Utah
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 worker’s income was much lower at 17.000, the state’s poverty rate was significantly lower at 9% compared to
California
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’s and Florida’s at 16% and 12% respectively. In terms of age, 28% of the
people
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 in
Utah
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 were under 18
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 those over 60 were only 8%. Surprisingly,
this
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 was the only region where young
people
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 outnumbered senior citizens. In comparison,
California
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 had marginally higher premature individuals than Florida, and its grey population was 10% lower than Florida’s at 13% and 23% sequentially.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, california, utah with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Metrics
  • Economic conditions
  • Cost of living
  • Percentage
  • Poverty line
  • Demographics
  • Workforce composition
  • Income disparity
  • Correlation
  • Economic health
  • Social-economic challenges
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