The chart below shown how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The given line chart demonstrates
proportion
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the proportion
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of junk food
consumptions
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consumption
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by residents in United
State
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during the
ten
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ten-year
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year
period, from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, it could be clearly seen that the citizens in
the
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America have visited considerably
the
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restaurants for buying
shorteats
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short eats
shortcuts
within
one
time
per week and
one
or two times per month during
contemporary
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period. The data record that individuals in America consumed junk food about
a
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33%
one
time
during the week in 2006 and it would be peaked level
comparing
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compared
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with other categories
in
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this
year
. Apparently, by 2013,
one
time
or two
time
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per month about
33
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a 33
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% ratio of consumers have gone to
the
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hotels
for
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to
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purchase instant foods. A glance at, it was
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at a
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a
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equal level.
According to
these
stastatistics
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statistics
, in the
year
2003, the buyers in
this
nation
have
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spend
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time
in
the
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cafeterias
one
time
per seven days approximately around 31% proportion. It was the biggest increment
in
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this
year
over the other
time
duration categories.
On the other hand
, daily customers in all three years was significantly
decline
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. It was lower than 5%.
Furthermore
, the figures reveal that during
this
period the
fast
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number of fast
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food lovers, who did not go to shops, was
decrease
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decreased
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than
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by
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5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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