You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, my name is Katharina Wilfinger and I am writing to you regarding your letter about the termination of our practice time in the community hall. We were very sad about
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and my friends practice Jazz on Mondays and Thursdays at the hall, to learn new songs for our concerts, which take
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every Friday at the local senior residency home. These weekly concerts bring much joy to the residents and a
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change in their daily routine. We understand that sometimes
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changes, that are not
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our power happen, so we hope we can come to a different arrangement. My group would be able to practice either on Sunday and Saturday mornings or on Tuesday evenings. Please let us know if either of these two arrangements would be feasible for you. With regards, Katharina Wilfinger
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