The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of occupations males and females choose to perform including maintenance, agriculture, and industry. There are a total of 4 pie charts comparing male and female statistics of workers in each state.

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, workers in Republic A are more varied in their jobs compared to those in Country B where the majority of citizens work as service providers.

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, in country A, service is the first choice of a male team (56%).

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, women who work in the service group (49%) are close in number to those who job in the agriculture sector (43%). The least popular occupation for men and women in Nation A is industry departments, with 15% and 8% respectively.

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, in nation B, all employees tend to work in service-related works regardless of their gender. 88% of female workers are in the assistance section and around two-thirds of male labour are in the mentioned group. Noticeably, females in

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nation are only 1% of the agriculture industry

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men, which is around 3% of the male population.

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