The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of occupations males and females choose to perform including maintenance, agriculture, and industry. There are a total of 4 pie charts comparing male and female statistics of workers in each state.
Overall
, workers in Republic A are more varied in their jobs compared to those in Country B where the majority of citizens work as service providers.
Firstly
, in country A, service is the first choice of a male team (56%).
However
, women who work in the service group (49%) are close in number to those who job in the agriculture sector (43%). The least popular occupation for men and women in Nation A is industry departments, with 15% and 8% respectively.
Lastly
, in nation B, all employees tend to work in service-related works regardless of their gender. 88% of female workers are in the assistance section and around two-thirds of male labour are in the mentioned group. Noticeably, females in
this
nation are only 1% of the agriculture industry
as well as
men, which is around 3% of the male population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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