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It is often argued most corporations provide uniforms for their employees that they must wear at any time of the day. This essay argues that although wearing uniforms causes discomfort to the workers, I believe that this gives a sense of identity.

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There is an
onging
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ongoing
 debate about companies' right in obligating their staff to put on an
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uniform
 during work hours.
However
, even though
this
 may
casue
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cause
 employees some
unpleseant
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unpleasant
 feelings, it creates that sense of belonging to the place they work for,
as well as
 giving the impression of a
unite
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 company. When a company creates its own uniform,
this
 serves in making it considered as a high-profile, modern and professional
bussiness
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business
, and people tend to classify it as a
trust-worthy
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 company. Despite the fact that
this
 has nothing to do with the business' actual level of performance, recent studies showed that a person will feel much safer if all team members of his/her service provider wear the same clothes.
Furthermore
, if all the employees in different departments are united in terms of clothes, they will certainly have more sense of respect and equality among their colleagues.
For instance
, if the
maketing
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marketing
 supervisor wears the same as the line manager, and the line manager wears the same as the department supervisor, they all will feel that they are equally important, and
as a result
, they all will be more effective and passionate about their jobs.
On the other hand
, it is totally justified for workers to experience discomfort when they have to wear something they did not choose for a long time.
In addition
 to the fact that
this
 deprives them
from
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 their minimal right in picking the outfit they find themselves in, some uniforms can
truely
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truly
 be unbearable. For
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, many banks force their female employees to wear high heels, and
this
 can seriously be dangerous for their health if worn for hours.
To conclude
, I think that
while
 workers may not be in favour of uniting their outfits, they all should understand that
this
 is
definately
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definitely
 in
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coumany's
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company's
 favour, and the more successful their
bussiness
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business
get
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, the more
pleseat
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pleasant
the
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they
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 will be.
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