pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The four pie charts compare the

electricity

generated between

Germany

and

France

during 2009, and it is measured in billions

kWh

Change preposition

of kWh

show examples

Overall

, it can be seen that conventional thermal was the main source of

electricity

Germany

whereas

nuclear was the main source in

France

.The bulk of

electricity

Germany

, whose total output was 560 billion kWh, came from conventional thermal, at 59.6%. In

France

, the total output was lower, at 510 billion kWh, and

in contrast

Germany

, conventional thermal accounted for just 10.3%, with most

electricity

coming from nuclear power (76%). In

Germany

, the proportion of nuclear power generated

electricity

was only one-fifth of the total.Moving on to renewables,

this

accounted for quite similar proportions for both countries, ranging from around 14% to 17% of the total

electricity

generated. In detail, in

Germany

, most of the renewables consisted of wind and biomass, totalling around 75%, which was far higher than for hydroelectric (17.7%) and solar (6.1%). The situation was very different in

France

, where hydroelectric made up 80.5% of renewable

electricity

, with biomass, wind and solar making up the remaining 20%. Neither country used geothermal energy.

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