Many parents are concerned about the violent computer games or movies or leisure activities. How can this impact children? What can be done to solve this problem?
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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