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The chart below shows the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart given below illustrates the average percentage of nutrients consumed through different daily meals(
breakfast
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, lunch, snacks, and
dinner
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) in the USA. The data is calculated on the basis of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 in the food.
Overall
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, most of the nutrients are consumed during
dinner
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whereas
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 citizens of the USA consume the least food nutrients during
breakfast
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.
Also
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,
sodium
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 and
sugar
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 are eaten in a large content making it the most consumed among other factors.
Firstly
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, in terms of
dinner
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, people have 43% of
sodium
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,
conversely
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 only 37% of saturated fat and 23%
sugar
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 is consumed,
thus
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 making
sodium
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 the highest consumption rate. By considering
breakfast
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, only 14% of
sodium
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, 16% of fat and 16 % of added
sugar
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 are taken by the people making
breakfast
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 a healthy one.
To conclude
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, having high concentrations of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 is not healthy, especially at
dinner
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, which makes the human body work more on digestion during sleep.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words breakfast, dinner, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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