The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
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The pie chart displays the result of a survey of kids' activities. The first graph illustrates the cultural and free time activities that
boys
participate in
whereas
the
second
graph shows the activities in which
girls
participate.
Overall
, computer games are mostly preferred by
boys
than
girls
while
reading is the
favourite
for
girls
apart from these both the genders have a wide variety of interests. nearly a third of
boys
spend more time on computer games which is the most
favourite
activity
among male children with approximately one-quarter of
boys
preferring basketball as the
second
most
favourite
while
17 per cent of
boys
chose soccer as their third most preferred game and a small minority with 11,10 per cent spend on skateboarding ,listening to music. roughly one-quarter of
girls
spend more time dancing which is their
favourite
activity
.
In contrast
to the boy's preferences reading is chosen by 21 per cent which is the
second
most
favourite
for girl children.
although
,among female children who play computer games is twice less than that of
boys
(18%)
this
activity
is third most popular on the girl's chart.a small portion(15) preferred netball as the
second
least
activity
and the least popular leisure is listening to music with a proportion of 10% equal to those on the first chart.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, second, girls, favourite, activity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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