It has been more than 40 years since man first landed on the moon. Some people think that space research is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More than 100 years ago , humanity started investing in space research and got to the point where a man landed on the moon. I strongly disagree that spending on new space discoveries is a waste of money. I am going to present my reasons in the following paragraphs.

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, our galaxy is a place that ,once it

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explored, will make humanity evolve. Even though

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type of Universe research takes a lot of time, the results will change the way Terra works: there would be new water resources, and new gas resources and,

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, the global economy will change positively.

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,the costs of living will be lowered and life in general will be much easier .

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, if we find a new planet with lots of gas supplies , the costs of gas on Terra will drop.

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, searching for new information in

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leads to chances for Individuals to find a new planet , similar to Terra.

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means that even though the Water Panet is not big enough for how much population is expected to have in the following years , a new planet ensures capacity for all of the next generations.

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, if the population of our floating globe

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100 trillion, we won't have enough area so, the discovery of territory may save millions of lives. In conclusion, I disagree that spending on new space discoveries is a waste of money not only because the new findings in our galaxy will lead to a better global economy ,but

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will ensure resources for the next generations.

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Your essay lacks a clear introduction that sets the context and introduces your opinion. The reader should understand your position from the beginning.

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You need to address the task more explicitly by providing a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument, even though you mentioned examples to support your argument, you should also consider the opposing viewpoint.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

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