It has been more than 40 years since man first landed on the moon. Some people think that space research is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More than 100 years ago , humanity started investing in space research and got to the point where a man landed on the moon. I strongly disagree that spending on new space discoveries is a waste of money. I am going to present my reasons in the following paragraphs.

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explored, will make humanity evolve. Even though

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type of Universe research takes a lot of time, the results will change the way Terra works: there would be new water resources, and new gas resources and,

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, the global economy will change positively.

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,the costs of living will be lowered and life in general will be much easier .

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, if we find a new planet with lots of gas supplies , the costs of gas on Terra will drop.

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, searching for new information in

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leads to chances for Individuals to find a new planet , similar to Terra.

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means that even though the Water Panet is not big enough for how much population is expected to have in the following years , a new planet ensures capacity for all of the next generations.

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, if the population of our floating globe

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100 trillion, we won't have enough area so, the discovery of territory may save millions of lives. In conclusion, I disagree that spending on new space discoveries is a waste of money not only because the new findings in our galaxy will lead to a better global economy ,but

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will ensure resources for the next generations.

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coherence cohesion

Your essay lacks a clear introduction that sets the context and introduces your opinion. The reader should understand your position from the beginning.

task achievement

You need to address the task more explicitly by providing a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument, even though you mentioned examples to support your argument, you should also consider the opposing viewpoint.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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