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the world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or the same condition of work for life.discuss the causes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for workin the future

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People
 nowadays cannot rely on the same job and
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circumstances in life. Because technology and expenses are increasing day by day. There are several causes and possible
solution
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 for the aforementioned statement which we will discuss in
this
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businessmen's
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 have
bottommed-out
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bottomed-out
 two or three extra works at a time, which they do for the tough time. So,
its
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 the
necassity
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necessity
 of today's life. With the passing
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time
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technology is
vasting
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fasting
 and every person wants
his self
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himself
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 to gain more than
other
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others
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.
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 why,
every one
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 is running here and there to match
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 footsteps with the technology.
Moreover
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delveloped
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developed
 countries where
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inflation is higher than
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employment,
people
cann't
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can't
 survive there
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without
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 having
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multiple works.
For example
, in a recent
survey
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 it has been shown that in Indonesia and
Pakistan
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 the inflation rate is more than
labour
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the labour
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 rate. So,
that
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 countries are not able to rise up for
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 few years because they aren't economically powerful. Mainly, the causes are the administration, rules and regulations, the authorities and the literacy rate. Obviously, if
people
 are more educated
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 they will have more
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 for a bright career. And
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more we have
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talented,
genious
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generous
genius
 and
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well-educated
people
 more we can get towards
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success and development.
To sum up
,
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 would say the government should introduce training
center
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 where
people
 can enhance their working capabilities.
Moreover
, the world of employment is changing fastly there's no survival with a single work. The authorities should work on training
centers
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 and job allocations for students as well. So that, every person earns his own and can fight
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inflation by giving
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rise to
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development.
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