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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some that
students
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 should choose what major
university
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 they like.
While
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 others say that they should merely be allowed to choose
subjects
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 like science and
technology
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 that will be useful in the
future
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. In
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 both views will be discussed and I think we
students
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 should be free to choose their
majors
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 at
university
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. On the one hand, some argue that universities should present some specific
majors
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 that will be useful in the
future
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such
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 as science and
technology
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, we cannot predict what
majors
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 will be useful in the
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.
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,
subjects
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 like art and music might be as important as
technology
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 in the
future
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, if we omit
subjects
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 like art and music, it might be very difficult to compensate for gap years.
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, all
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 have two sides, practical and theory, which most
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the theory is taught in universities. Without
theory
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 bad effects may happen in business and
society
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, some
students
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 are very gifted in areas like art and literature, so without those
majors
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 in
university
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society
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 may lose some positive influence.
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, it is commonly believed that
students
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 should be free to choose their
majors
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 at
university
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 because
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 has some benefits for
society
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. It is true that if people choose whatever they like, they may be
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happy person because they know what they are doing, they have a great passion for that.
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, they work hard to be an effective person in their major and
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 and be a creative person in his/her major.
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 engagement may have a great influence on
society
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. In conclusion, some people think that universities should present
subjects
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 that will matter in the
future
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such
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 as science and
technology
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.
However
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, others say that they should be allowed to choose whatever they like. In my point of view,
students
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 have the right to select their major at
university
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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