Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives now than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society.

Thanks to Modern medical science, it

possible

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to fight many illnesses.

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is one

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why individuals today live longer than previous generations. In my opinion,

this

dvelopment

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development

in medical science can bring a

negaitve

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negative

impacts

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in

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on

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many

community

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communities

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around the world.

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with, there are several reasons why I believe that

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the life expectancy of

people

can have detrimental

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society

.

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,

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modern medical researches contribute to

improve

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the

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humans

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health , which means

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the

populations

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population

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of the earth. To illustrate,

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the life expectancy of humans can create a lot of pressure

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natural resources namely, food,

water

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.

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, in

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our

society

will face

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shortage of these

resoruces

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resources

,

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because

this

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resoruces

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resources

resource

cannot meet the demand

of

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for

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dramatic

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growth of inhabitants.

Secondly

,

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the population means

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an increase

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the

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older

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number of older

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people

in our community which

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can create

a

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huge issues.

For example

, the

governments

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needs to build more nursing homes or

retirment

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retirement

home in order to look after senior

people

, which

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deplete the public budget.

Finally

, more population means more poverty in

society

.

This

is because the number of applicants who will compete in the same jobs will

increase

, which means the number of

applicatns

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applicants

applications

higher

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than

available

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jobs opportunity in many different sectors.

Therefore

, the rate of crime will

increase

in our

society

and the living standards of

people

will decline .

To sum up

, from my perspective,

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advancements

advances

in medical science can bring harmful consequences for

society

including, we will encounter

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in

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food,

water

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, deplete the

the

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governments

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government's

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funds,

increase

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and increase

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the

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rate of crime and

povery

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poverty

.