Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives now than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society.
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possible
to fight many illnesses. Add a missing verb
is possible
This
is one reasons
why individuals today live longer than previous generations. In my opinion, Change to a singular noun
reason
this
dvelopment
in medical science can bring a Correct your spelling
development
negaitve
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negative
impacts
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impact
in
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on
community
around the world.
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communities
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe that increase
the life expectancy of Wrong verb form
increasing
people
can have detrimental in
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to
society
. Firstly
, the
modern medical researches contribute to Correct article usage
apply
improve
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improving
the
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apply
humans
health , which means Change the noun form
human
increase
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increasing
populations
of the earth. To illustrate, Fix the agreement mistake
population
increase
the life expectancy of humans can create a lot of pressure Wrong verb form
increasing
in
natural resources namely, food, Change preposition
on
water
. Correct word choice
and water
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, in future
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society
will face the
shortage of these Correct article usage
a
resoruces
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resources
,
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apply
this
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these
resoruces
cannot meet the demand Correct your spelling
resources
resource
of
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for
dramatic
growth of inhabitants.
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the dramatic
Secondly
, increase
the population means Wrong verb form
increasing
increase
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an increase
the
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in the
older
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number of older
people
in our community which this
can create Correct pronoun usage
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a
huge issues. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, the governments
needs to build more nursing homes or Fix the agreement mistake
government
retirment
home in order to look after senior Correct your spelling
retirement
people
, which this
deplete the public budget. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Finally
, more population means more poverty in society
. This
is because the number of applicants who will compete in the same jobs will increase
, which means the number of applicatns
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applicants
applications
higher
than Add a missing verb
is higher
available
jobs opportunity in many different sectors. Correct article usage
the available
Therefore
, the rate of crime will increase
in our society
and the living standards of people
will decline .
To sum up
, from my perspective, advancments
in medical science can bring harmful consequences for Correct your spelling
advancements
advances
society
including, we will encounter shortage
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shortages
in
food, Change preposition
of
water
, deplete the Correct word choice
and water
the
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apply
governments
funds, Change to a genitive case
government's
governments'
increase
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and increase
the
rate of crime and Change preposition
in the
povery
.Correct your spelling
poverty
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