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The chart illustrates the stages of production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station.

The chart illustrates the stages of production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
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The chart illustrates the stages of production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 during the day
the
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in the
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 first stage the
water
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 from
river
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the river
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enter
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enters
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 the
dam
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 and
ending
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ends
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 with
produce
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producing
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the
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apply
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electricity via
generator
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a generator
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 and distribution to homes.
Furthermore
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, during
th
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the
 night the
water
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is tranfer
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tranfer
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transfer
 from low-to
high level
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high-level
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reservour
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reservoir
 to
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dam
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the dam
a dam
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 in order to
strore
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store
 the
water
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. Regarding day, the first stage the
water
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 move from
river
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the river
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thourgh
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through
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dam
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the dam
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.
The
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 next stage, the
water
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 from
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dam
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the dam
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enter
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enters
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 the turbines and the turbines rotate and produce
mechnical
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mechanical
energy
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. After that, the generator
convert
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converts
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 the
mechnical
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mechanical
energy
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 to electric
energy
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.
Finally
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, electric
energy
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is distribution
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distribution
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distributed
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 via power lines
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and
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national grids and after that reach to local
people
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people's
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 homes. In terms of night, the flow of
water
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 pumping from low to
high level
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high-level
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reservour
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reservoir
 in order to store it in the
dam
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, because the
dam
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 will close.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, dam, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • stages of production
  • chart
  • illustrates
  • description
  • process
  • advantages
  • electricity
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable
  • dam
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generator
  • transformer
  • transmission lines
  • environmentally friendly
  • cost-effective
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