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It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to the younger population in some countries. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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Over the years
due to
 abundant resources available across the globe,
world
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 is seeing
a
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apply
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population
 growth. As the
population
 grows, it can be divided into 2 categories. Young and Old
Population
. It is true that to control
population
 growth, few countries have placed child restriction
policy
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policies
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 and that has now adversely affected the country in many ways. In the current century, countries like China
is
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are
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 seeing a huge increase in old
people
 than young
adults
.
This
 is
due to
that
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the
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 fact that their 2-child policy restricted
people
 from having more kids and now the country is seeing more
adults
 than children.
This
 has negatively impacted the country. For any kind of
occupation
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 companies are looking for young
adults
. Young
adults
 are active and healthy and they perform the job faster. Old
people
on the other hand
, at their retirement age are still working to support their families. In a world of capitalism, we are seeing young entrepreneurs building revolutionary technologies that are changing the world.
This
 is possible because young
people
 are able to adapt to the changes and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and are very innovative. In order to create disruptive technologies, we need innovation and it's possible
by
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for
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 young
people
. It is sad to see that some parts of the globe
is
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are
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 seeing
increase
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an increase
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 in
old
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the old
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people
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people's
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population
due to
 the policies placed to control
population
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the population
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. China,
however
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,however
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 understood the problem and is now encouraging their
people
 to have more kids to address the disparity in the
population
. In order for the human race to survive, it's imperative to have
young
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a young
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population
. Countries should encourage their
people
 to have children in a safe way.
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