It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to the younger population in some countries. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

Over the years
due to
abundant resources available across the globe,
world
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is seeing
a
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population
growth. As the
population
grows, it can be divided into 2 categories. Young and Old
Population
. It is true that to control
population
growth, few countries have placed child restriction
policy
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and that has now adversely affected the country in many ways. In the current century, countries like China
is
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seeing a huge increase in old
people
than young
adults
.
This
is
due to
that
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fact that their 2-child policy restricted
people
from having more kids and now the country is seeing more
adults
than children.
This
has negatively impacted the country. For any kind of
occupation
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companies are looking for young
adults
. Young
adults
are active and healthy and they perform the job faster. Old
people
on the other hand
, at their retirement age are still working to support their families. In a world of capitalism, we are seeing young entrepreneurs building revolutionary technologies that are changing the world.
This
is possible because young
people
are able to adapt to the changes and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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and are very innovative. In order to create disruptive technologies, we need innovation and it's possible
by
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young
people
. It is sad to see that some parts of the globe
is
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are
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seeing
increase
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an increase
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in
old
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the old
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people
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population
due to
the policies placed to control
population
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the population
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. China,
however
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understood the problem and is now encouraging their
people
to have more kids to address the disparity in the
population
. In order for the human race to survive, it's imperative to have
young
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a young
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population
. Countries should encourage their
people
to have children in a safe way.
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