Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The way the new generations are being raised is different from the 70s and 80s. I believe
this
is the reason for the high number of crimes among underage children. Thus
, psychologists believe that they lack social and emotional learning. I strongly agree and I will discuss my reasons below.
Firstly
, parents are now very busy pursuing their careers having little or no time to engage their offspring. For instance
, in Africa most especially in Lagos, Nigeria, they leave home for work as early as 5 am to avoid traffic and return only from 8 pm, thereby leaving their nannies to look after their upspring. Although
they may have a close family around to assist with the needs of the children it is never enough because they can not fulfill the emotional support required. If these emotional needs are not met they begin to seek it from somewhere else thereby joining bad gangs.
Secondly
, teenagers are exposed to all forms of gadgets as early as 2 years, most homes have computers that are easily accessible. Furthermore
, these teenagers play games that involve all sorts of violence as a result
, there is a high rise of children expressing themselves through these games that were played or watched. A good example is in the Western World, weapons
are easily available, and they have a Rephrase
where weapons
high
record of Correct word choice
higher
shooting
in schools than they have ever recorded over the years. Sadly Replace the word
shootings
this
is also
on the rise.
In Conclusion, I agree that teenagers that
are been raised in the current generation lack social and emotional intelligence. They are not interacting like they should and are not given the right attention. Unfortunately, they are now more Correct pronoun usage
who
gadget driven
. Families need to be more intentional about their little ones.Add a hyphen
gadget-driven
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