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The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given table compares information about the average times spent by United Kingdom inhabitants of two different genders on several daily routines.
Overall
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, for both genders, sleeping is the most popular than any other means of activity
while
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 sports does not.
Additionally
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, more men than
women
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 chose to spend their
time
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 on employment and study, and all leisure
activities
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. Meanwhile, compared to the number of males times, the number of
women
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 times are considerably higher for housework and childcare. Looking into details, it is evident that males and females spend more than 8
hours
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 of sleep in a day.
In contrast
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, they only spent less than half an hour on sports
activities
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 per day.
Furthermore
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, on a day, more men chose to dedicate their
time
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 to employment and study, and all free
time
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activities
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 which are 3
hours
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 45 minutes and 5
hours
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 25 minutes respectively.
On the contrary
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,
women
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 only spend a total of less than 7
hours
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 doing both
activities
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.
Moreover
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. United Kingdom
women
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 are spending 3
hours
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 on housework and a quarter hour on childcare. It is shown that they spent more
time
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 at home than males.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, time, activities, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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