The chart shows the percentage change in the proportion of international students among university graduates in Canada between 2001 and 2006.

The chart shows the percentage change in the proportion of international students among university graduates in Canada between 2001 and 2006.
The chart shows the percentage change in the proportion of international students among university graduates in Canada between 2001 and 2006. In the diorama, it can be seen eight different universities,which are called New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, Quebec, Alberta, British Colombia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador,
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and Ontario
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,the number of graduations by international students increased significantly at all universities from 2001 to 2006. In the five years period, from 2001 to 2006 New Brunswick rose by almost five
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from 7% to
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approximately
12%. in the same way, Nova Scotia grew up from about 6% to just
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over 10
%. The highest growth was in Britain Columbia, where graduates had doubled, from slightly less than 5% to about 11%. Other Canadian universities made modest rises of about 2 to 3
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. The lowest percentage increase was in Alberta
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, from almost 5% to 7%. In conclusion, it can be added that
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the distribution
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of international graduates across the provinces of Canada had varied particularly over
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period.
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