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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six area of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six area of the world.
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The given pie charts
illustrattes
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illustrates
illustrate
 the proportion of
water
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 usage for 3 different reasons(agriculture, industrial and domestic) in 6
differents
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different
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 countries .
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that , Aferica,
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central
centeral
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central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 vast
amount
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amounts
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 of
water
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 for
agriculture
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agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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,
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whereas
wherease
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whereas
 North America and Europe used most of their
water
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 for industrial work
Aferica
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Africa
,
centeral
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central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 provided above 80% of
water
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 for
agriculture
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agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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while
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 North America and Europe used below 16%,
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however
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,however
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 these two countries increased their consumption
on
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of
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 industrial work and supplied more than a quarter to factories.
On the other hand
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, household
water
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usages
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usage
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 remained under 20% in Europe and North and South America,
while
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 in other three
nation
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nations
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 utilized less
water
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 for
domestics
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domestic
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
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