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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
households
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 in owned and rented houses in houses in England and Wales over 93 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
percentage
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 of families in owned
accommodation
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 showed dramatically increased,
while
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 the proportion of
households
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 in rented
accommodations
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accommodation
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 showed sharply decreased.
Furthermore
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, in the certain year of
households
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in
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rented and owned have the same
percentage
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. Looking at
th
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the
 chart in more detail, in
the
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apply
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1918
households
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 in
rented
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the rented
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 house was at the highest
percentage
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 at approximately 75%,
whereas
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households
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 in
owned
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the owned
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 house
was
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were
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 at
lowest
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the lowest
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percentage
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 at about 22%. From 1939 to 1953 the
households
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 in rented and owned
accommodation
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 showed unchanged
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percentage
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percentages
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 at around 68%,
32
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and 32
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% ,respectively. In
the
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apply
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1971 both
households
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 in rented and owned
accommodation
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 have the same
the
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apply
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percentage
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have
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has
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 almost 50 per cent. In the next years the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in
rented
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the rented
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 house showed decreased, but in 2011
is
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it
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 showed
increase
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an increase
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 .
In contrast
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, from 1981 to 2011 the
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number of
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households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 showed raised, and in 2001 reached a peak at almost 69% and
retend
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pretend
rented
 houses reach the lowest point at approximately 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, percentage, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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